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First I have to state the most obvious thing: everything flows well, and the looping is done great. It's fluent, and there's enough different stuff in it. Everything is drawn well, since it's clear what every person/place is.

I would've liked the different people and places to have something in common though. Or some climax that the loop is going to. Just seeing all those different people merging gets a bit boring.
The background music, a great choice, makes it kind of relaxing though. So if that's what you're going for you succeeded.

Anyway, you deserve the daily fourth prize. Maybe for next time you can make something exiting happen.

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When I open up the flash I was surprised by the nice play button. To make the things around the play button in paper style is really nice.

I like the story and the main character. It was creative to make him like that. I think it would be worthwile to make a series out of that. That same creativeness was also in the cigarette he quickly came across, and the zombie worm that wanted money from him.

The graphics are good. The animation was really fluid, and I didn't notice any oddities. The paper guy himself is a bit too simple though. I liked that he had those hook hands and a bit of a rayman-style body, but the face and body are drawn too fast. It would look better if you could draw them with more detail. He had good facial expressions though.

In general I really like this animation. It's not amazing, and it's really short, but executed well.

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Amazing

The best thing about this flash is how you could make the whole story with just three colours. The dragons were pretty simple, but because of how they stood, interacted with each other and their behavior I could undersand who was the "male" and who the "female", what they wanted from each other and their emotions.

The music fitted just nicely too. I could write a review about the music too, but I'll leave that to another time :). Long story short: it was slow enough and simple enough to fit with the flash, but not loud enough to distract me from looking.

The only thing which I hoped for something better was how the story wasn't worked out good enough. It's a pretty good and simple story, and that's what makes this flash really good along with the style you have, but I hoped for more interaction between the two dragons. Or at least more of an explanation about the whole story.
After the flash ended I still had some questions, like how fire could kill a dragon, why the white dragon could pass through white stuff at the start but not through the wall.

What you have is amazing though. I really enjoyed watching it.

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I think this game is really awesome. Not just because it's really hard, but because of its new way of platforming.

The idea of exploring a game by dying is genius. It gives the game something I hadn't seen before.
This also forces you to be strategic in each level. Because you need to get at least a few perfect pig runs in the later levels, you can't rely on a lucky jump once to clear the level. You need to plan, and get to the end, or almost the end, multiple times in a row. But never enough times to let it get boring.

Another thing I really liked was the music. The slightly irritating but awesome music fits just perfectly with this game. It did get repetive, but that's no problem since you made a mute button.
Good thing you added a self-destruct button too.

It's not perfect though. Because it's that hard to complete a level without losing any pigs, I would've liked something for it. I've only completed a few levels without losing any pigs, but apart from a score bonus you get nothing. Maybe you could make a medal for it, or even more bonus levels?

Speaking of more levels, this game would be perfect for a level editor. I would've loved making levels of my own, and playing other levels ranked for most fun and most difficult. This would make the game even more addicting, and give some more length to the game.

Another small thing is that I would like a pause button. Especially because planning a level can take several minutes, and when you just have a few nice death places, it's irritating that you can't pause the game.

None of these things really bothered me though, they are more like extras I would've liked.

Short conclusion: Although the game is not perfect, it's going straight in my favorites.
I'm number 95 to complete it ;)

It's a good start, but still a pretty bad game.
It's always good if you don't have any glitches/bugs. You have got the basic code right, which is of course a good thing.
It's really a challenge to win, but not impossible. That's good too.

There are a few things that cause this game to look amateurish:

- No instructions. Although it's pretty easy to understand that you have to press the up arrow to drive forward and the right and left arrow keys to drive left/right, it would be nice if it had been said. Also, say that I'm the blue car.
- You can press the bottom arrow key at the start to drive backwards to the finish and win.
- The graphics are too simple. Although the lines in the corners are a nice addition, the green and white parts are too flat.
- You can drive through the other car.
I also didn't like that the other car is faster than you and starts off much faster.

Amazing

I think it's really great how you could make this. This must've taken a lot of time and research. I love to just scroll through all of the items/lengths to see the huge difference in size.

I think the best part about this is that it looks really nice, and structured. It's immediately clear what this flash is about, and having just one button makes the game organized.
The soft music adds to that. It's nice to hear, and not distracting.

I don't know if this can be used as a study book kind of thing though. It would be nice if we could imput a length (like 10^-27), and get the item or length we're searching for. And maybe even an object. resembling it. If you're looking for something, it takes a bit long to search for it now.
Maybe you could even make a small dictionary with a few items and their lengths, so you scroll to it by typing its name?

Another minor thing I dislike is that some of the items don't blend in too well with their environments. Especially from 10^23 to 10^27, it was clearly divisible it were google images. If you could make the background a bit darker, the feeling of space would be created more, and the pictures would look nicer compared to the background.

Nonetheless it's a great gadget, and not something you see often.

It doesn't sound like something serious, especially now I've read the author comments. However, you want a real review so here is one.

I'm not starting off negative. It's your first audio submission, so it's nice that you want to sumbit something. It's also good to hear that the younger ones are interested in Newgrounds as well. :)
It was short, but 470kb is still pretty small for audio. Good job on that.

I'll have to point out the obvious though: your cousin is barely hearable. If you can tell him to talk clearer and a bit further away from the microphone it would sound less horrible to the ears.
Maybe you could post the "lyrics" in the author comments so we know what he's saying.
It wasn't completely unhearable though. I managed to hear everything after listening to it a few times.

For next time, it would also be better if there was a bit more time spent on the story. It didn't really have an end. But what bothered me most was the "and then, and then". I guess you can't help that with a story written by someone so young, but it does take away from the quality.

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The intro is great. It's original, and it makes it possible for the music to kick in after that. I don't know what it has to do with the rest of the song though. It seems a bit odd that, after a rejection, a happy house song plays.

That doesn't take away anything from how good the song sounds though. I like how happy it is, and the different sounds put in this song sound good. Especially the voice in it. I liked the interrupting notes you put in at 1:48 and onwards too.
The beat is just right for a house track. It's not too loud, but certainly present.

Although you can't prevent the song from getting a bit repetive with a house track, it's a bit too much. Maybe you can make the voice say something else sometimes? Or you can make an instrument disappear, like you did at 1:25. That bit sounded really good.

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It starts off with clear bell sounds. This is almost a habit of you. Not that I mind though, it's nice to have some sort of personal thing that often returns in your songs. Again it makes a good intro. Something calm which you can break later with percussion.
This bell sound didn't give me pain in the ears at the start, but it was good that you slowly took it out. For start because it gives that difference between calm and percussion, and because the song sounds more like a D&B track because of that.

The softer part after 0:48 sounds well. I don't know why you picked that race car sound, but it actually fitted there. A good addition.
What I like less is the drums coming in at 1:01. It throws the song off a bit. I don't know exactly how to explain it, but it pulls in all the attention. That, and each time a hit of the drum sounds just before the start of a new beat, which sounds a bit irritating.

I really loved the drums at 1:55 and onwards though. It's not spectacular, but a good beat before the end. When the electronic sound comes in at 2:18 it becomes the best part of this song IMO.

I liked the ending. It wasn't just a fade-out, you kept one instrument "alive" and stopped the rest. Maarten's idea of an echoing snare drum would make it even better though. After all, nobody's perfect. ;)

Apart from that drum thing it's a good song. You picked the right instruments to mix together. The main melody is good, something I hadn't heard before. Actually, the whole song doesn't have familiar elements, apart from the structure (calm part, loud part, calm part). Originality is always a plus.

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This is actually drawn really well.

I like original drawings more than tutorial-based ones. It originality. That doesn't mean it's not good though.
I like how you did the background. It's happy and colourful, but doesn't attract the attraction that would normally go to the Pokémon.

I'll just say something about each of the Pokémon. Know that I think each of the Pokémon is drawn good, there's no ugly one. All mistakes are details. And sorry if I spelt a name wrong.

I really like how you drew Pidgeotto. His posture is good, and his/her claws look really great. I don't know many people who can draw him/her this way. The wings look different from the Pidgeotto's in the series though. The feathers are a bit more square, and the lines separating the feathers should be a bit longer. This doesn't ruin him or anything, just a detail.
Nidoqueen is drawn good too, but with more mistakes than the rest of the Pokémon. That´s probably because she is the hardest pokemon to draw, with all her scales.

Nidoqueen´s mouth is a bit odd. The black in the middle is too square, you should make the gap a bit larger. Second, her ear shouldn´t be the same colour as her belly, but brown. Another colouring mistake is that her right boob should be yellow. Lastly, the length of some of her body parts seem too small. Her head shouldn´t be as large as her body. I understand that it would seem odd if one pokemon was half of the painting. So maybe you could put her on the far background, so you can draw her realistically large?
Pikachu is drawn nicely. Although his hands should have fingers, and his head shouId be connected to his body more, I forgive you because you drew the cheesy smile so nice. His small eyes are just too cute. And that while Pikachu is one of my least favorite Pokémon.
Ivysaur is drawn almost perfectly as well. The only thing I can find with him is that the dots on his body should be green/blueish and not red.
For haunter the only thing I would've liked differently is a bit more variationg in colour. Now almost his entire body is the same colour. But his shape is perfect, and his mouth is amazing.
Paras seems a bit sad, but ah well, he's probably always like that. I actually like that. (Not that he's sad, but how you drew him). The only mistake I see with him is that his back legs are a bit too big. But the rest is drawn well. Especially the mushrooms.

These are the "mistakes" I can see in your drawing. Though there are some mistakes, your cousin can certainly be happy if he gets this drawing. It's happy, colourful, and your best drawing yet.
A very happy birthday to your cousin.

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Graphic-wise this poster is executed perfectly. Giving the poster no colour but the guy in the middle and "rebellion festival" makes a contrast which gives life to the poster.

The man is really well drawn, as are the letters. The rough edge the letters have is along the lines fo the rebellious punk. Well done.
The rest of the poster looks like it's done quick and sloppy, but that doesn't matter. It gives even more of a rebellion idea to the poster. Probably also because of how rough the backgrounds looks.

Probably the only thing I would've liked differently is to give an idea what the rebellion festival is. I guess if you see a poster, you'll also want some information about when the festival is, and what it is. Maybe it's because I don't really like punk music, but I wouldn't have known this is a poster for a punk festival if you wouldn't have written it in the author comments.

Apart from that it's pretty much a perfect poster. I could've seen it in the streets, and think that's a nice poster. So good job.

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I must say I know close to nothing about the different kinds of dragons, and the anatomy of them. I guess that's because of the lack of games that have dragons in them in my childhood.

Even though I know very little about dragons, I can imagine this being a great drawing. The scales look amazing, and the pointyness of basically everything about the dragon really fits. I also think that the difference in line thickness is great.

The fact that this piece of art has no colour makes it even more special. Because you made the dragon without colour, you made a picture that is different from most dragons.

The best thing about this picture is its style. You're really good if you can make shadows by just making some parts more detailed, which you did.

Basically the only thing I would've liked differently would be a more special boarder. It feels a bit simple compared to the detailed dragon. The fact that you made a border is good though, and if you would've made just the dragon would probably make me feel like there is something missing in this picture.

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